Blog post feedback?

I'm writing a series of blog posts right now around building privacy friendly applications. I've just wrapped up the draft for "How to build a privacy friendly app", part two will be targeted at services/SaaS.

Problem is I'm not very good at writing when it comes to telling a story, spent too much time in my life writing code.

Here's the post in its draft state, currently it's hidden in that you need the link to access it

I'd love for feedback on my post and if you want me to take a look at anything you've written (code or otherwise) feel free to drop it here and I'll pay it back.